Hello all. As you may or may not know my name is Renzel Villegas, others call me Zel or Renzie. I was born here in Guelph Ontario, Canada, on August 30, 1997. I am going to take this time to talk to you about myself and try my very best to familiarise myself to all of you and your beautiful faces. To majority of people I am somewhat of an extrovert. Friendly and outgoing. This is very true. I am someone who enjoys adventure, adrenaline, and non-stop thrills. I can never handle a boring moment. The feeling of being bored just makes me sick. I am also a huge fan of music. I listen to most kinds of music but I usually listen to rap. To be honest the vulgarity in the lyrics is inappropriate for most rap songs, but the beat just keeps me hooked in. My favourite artists include G Eazy, Chance the Rapper, and ScHoolboy Q. Even though rap is my more preferred genre, I also admire a little alternative or house music just to mix it up a little. I am also a very athletic individual. I have played many sports but, my favourite sport is soccer. I have played soccer my whole life. I have played for Guelph and OLOL for quite a number of years now. Another activity I partake in is dance. I started dancing at a very young age. Now I am a competitive dancer at the Movement Dance Company and I enjoy every second of it. Apart from all my extracurricular activities, I also work part time at the West End Recreational Centre as a swimming instructor. I enjoy working there very much. I enjoy teaching individuals of all ages and watching their skills improve throughout the weeks. It gives you a really heartwarming feeling inside knowing that you have helped your students become better swimmers. As for my school life, it is amazing. The experiences have been memorable and I can't wait to see what grade 12 has in store for me. I have been in the honour roll for grades 10 and 11. I guess hard work, consistency and dedication surely pay off. At this point you are probably wondering why I decided to take this course. At first, I was a little bit skeptical of this course. I was unsure whether I wanted to stay in it. But, to be honest, the more I was familiarised with what I would be partaking in, my confidence level grew and I was beginning to enjoy this class. Little things like the class blog, creating my own blog, really interest me. Writing to me is just another way to express emotion. Writing to me is non-judgmental, care free, enjoyable, limitless, imaginative and wonderful. I like reading what people have to write as well as writing myself. This class will definitely help me become a better literary artist in the future. Thank you Mrs. Reidel for letting me be a part of this group. I promise I will work hard from beginning to the end.
Hey Renzel, I am very glad to have you as part of this group. I think you're going to add a little spice to the mix. Your writing flows like conversation, which is nice, and you shared a lot about yourself, which is great, but...it is a bit long for a blog. Next time be more concise and to the point. Blog readers want to get the message fast.
ReplyDeleteThere are some technical issues to fix;
1. comma after Guelph
2. To most of you I like food? this is odd
3. favourite, spelled correctly once and incorrectly at least twice
4, And is a conjunction that joins two ideas, it should not begin a sentence
5. you have some sentence fragments, which you can get away with in a conversational piece like this, but not in more formal writing
6. comma before "but" for pause
7. space after punctuation in Mrs.
Fixed it :)
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